Focus
- What's the point? Does the writer have an explicit thesis, or is the
point implicit? Do you come away from the paper feeling like it has communicated
a clear message that you could articulate for yourself?
Organization
- Is the paper arranged chronologically or by some other logical order?
Do you have any suggestions about how the writer might improve the sequence
of paragraphs? When you look at the paragraphs individually, do they seem
unified and coherent, or will the writer have to work on some of them
to make sure the sentences are arranged logically and that each paragraphs
Development
- Does the paper have enough detail to paint a vivid mental image in your
mind of the people, places, events, or ideas that writer wants to convey?
Could the writer use more storytelling elements like description, figurative
language, or dialogue? Does the writer handle abstractions and general
statements by supporting them with concrete detail, or are there vague
spots that could be further developed?